Wednesday, December 24, 2008

A SHORT PROJECT FOR MY BOY

Arty Farty had a party
and all the farts were there
Tooty Frooty laid a beauty
and they all went out for air

Then all the farts raised their parts
and they all let out big cheers
Biggo smiles for Arty Farty
cause all the air had cleared

* The first bit Mick told me years ago, I don't think he knew who told him or whom created it. But hell, i'm gonn have some fun with it and make a short for my boy to giggle at.

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5 Comments:

At 12/24/2008 08:37:00 PM , Blogger Mick said...

the second verse sucks... it has 'all' in it too many times... the structure is different to the first verse and 'biggo smiles' is a crap phrase

The picture is peachy

 
At 12/26/2008 01:34:00 PM , Blogger The Tale Tales of the Wayfarer said...

yum....I think the third verse needs work....but thats just me


I want to help

 
At 12/30/2008 12:26:00 PM , Blogger Mick said...

sorry sorry me again, I can't stand by and let your chunky illiterate fingers loose on this dish

Arty Farty had a party,
all the farts were there
Then Tooty Frooty did a beauty
so they all went out for air

'and' is a lazy way to get from somewhere to somewhere else..

'tooty fruity laid a beauty 'and' they all went out for air'

suggests that the two are happening alongside each other rather than one being the comedic reaction to the other. God is in the details
THINK MAN, THINK!

 
At 12/31/2008 12:17:00 AM , Blogger Gene Fowler said...

A good catch, about the "and".

I think we should remove the "Then".

Arty Farty had a party
and all the farts were there
Tooty Frooty laid a beauty
So they all went out for air

A good call on the "so".

I'm still toying with a second verse to string it out to 60 seconds.

All the farts raised their parts
hooting out big cheers
back inside for arty's party
as all the air had cleared

I dunno...but I do know...

yer nuts

 
At 1/01/2009 12:39:00 PM , Blogger Gene Fowler said...

Hey Kate had a neat one!

Different structure, but still good!

Just then, as she pleased
Art’s girlfried, Louise,
Let a stinker, for which she had flair.
T’was silent but deadly,
Such a beautiful medley
Left everyone gasping for air.”

 

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